Jonathan Treherne Posted December 15, 2013 Share Posted December 15, 2013 Hi Everybody at the www.cinematography Forum, Thank you for everybody's wise words and great advice, I have come on a great amount since I have started following this forum. I have just finished a short film (about 35 minutes in duration) for my 3rd, and Final, year in University. I am studying 'Film & Television Production' in the UK and would love any creative/constructive criticism that people have so that I can improve/gain some skills. This is my first short film I have shot & lit myself although I have worked on other capacity's on some very small independent films. Here is a trailer that our group have produced, i'm looking for advice to do with camerawork/lighting rather than trailer editing (as I only had partial input on this). Obviously it goes without saying we don't have copyright for the songs used but this is okay for our module: This was shot on a 5D mk II (as is commonplace for student films). Many, many thanks for the time taken to watch the trailer and provide feedback. All the Best, Jonny Treherne Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bob Speziale Posted June 21, 2014 Share Posted June 21, 2014 Not sure why there are no comments. I just joined the forum and saw your trailer. As a novice myself it looks very well shot and very well acted. Maybe it's the fact I'm in the US, but I didn't hav a clue to what the film was about. It seemed like all action and no discernible story. Hope that helps in some way. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Premium Member Simon Wyss Posted June 21, 2014 Premium Member Share Posted June 21, 2014 Not to be offensive or negative in any way, only one thing I see that I see so often: Constant slight hyperfocus. Try to pull out the lens a little bit more, set the plane of sharpness closer up since the depth of field spreads asymmetrically in front of and behind that plane. Another point is: why the chopped movements when you have a human subject—if they are in? I find that very forbidding, with all movies. You have very good actors, let them pull the audience. Technics should not disturb. An old fart’s opinion 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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