Please critic my cinematography

[Rotondwa Ravhura]

here is a link to my latest piece, shot on Nikon d800... #studentfilm #southafrica https://www.dropbox.com/s/jgajidjpp3pi39h/Video%202018-09-03%2C%2017%2001%2039.mp4?dl=0 

 

[Rotondwa Ravhura]

Guys if you understand please say something 

[Marley Hamilton]

I know you're probably looking for an experienced camera operator/DP's feedback and although I'm none of those things (I'm a student, new to camera) I thought you matched your lighting really well, I enjoyed the pace of your shots, composition and framing. I'd say there was a moment, at the cut after the line: "panini was my favourite" feels a little off. Do you have coverage of a wide of the girl waiting for the panini at the table? It would have been nice to see a reverse or different angle with the conversation between the lead and the mean girl. Did you track or zoom in on the girl at the table, with potentially other angles of characters listening to the ones delivering the lines. Cool little short, better than what I can do ?

[Bob Speziale]

Very nice video. There's a problem with the sound. The room noises drown out the vocals at times so when they are speaking English wihout subtitles they are hard to understand.