Noah,
I think you have some strong stuff in there. Some very nice lighting. Also, it all seems to be of really good quality (i myself have problems editing with both HD and older 35mm stuff and have it both look good in the same timeline).
It does feel a bit slow. Maybe just faster cuts or music wouldn't make it seem as long? I think that 2 minutes is a good length, but maybe there wasn't enough variety in the beginning so it felt longer than it is.