Dong Won Lee Posted September 22, 2018 Share Posted September 22, 2018 Hi guys I'm new to this forum and am very excited to join. I recently got into videography and storytelling and I created this video about our love for cafes. I would appreciate any feedback. I am a beginner and eager to learn more. Here's a link to the video. Thanks! Dong Won Lee Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Max Field Posted September 23, 2018 Share Posted September 23, 2018 Looking at this, I'm not sure how it expresses a "love" for cafes. Were you allowed to use dialog for this project? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dong Won Lee Posted September 23, 2018 Author Share Posted September 23, 2018 The idea is how a person can go to a cafe, work on their craft for hours and hours, from day to night getting things done. The fireworks is an analogy for creativity and cafe is an analogy for a persons creative workspace. Yes dialog was allowed. Do you think it would've communicated the story a lot better if I included dialog? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daniel D. Teoli Jr. Posted September 23, 2018 Share Posted September 23, 2018 (edited) I think it is pretty good. (But I am not a commercial photog, only do documentary work.) It looks professional except for some color glitch that popped up for a second. Looked like a commercial for a hotel with product placements for the credit card and coffee. Good work! Edited September 23, 2018 by Daniel D. Teoli Jr. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Max Field Posted September 23, 2018 Share Posted September 23, 2018 (edited) The idea is how a person can go to a cafe, work on their craft for hours and hours, from day to night getting things done. The fireworks is an analogy for creativity and cafe is an analogy for a persons creative workspace. Yes dialog was allowed. Do you think it would've communicated the story a lot better if I included dialog? Yeah I wasn't getting that via the things on screen. It might be because the concept of "loving cafes" isn't a commonly discussed thing, so dialogue could be needed to establish what everything is pertaining to. If you need to stay visual, the transitions on screen don't exactly imply the fireworks are happening within the character's head. After a second look I see you masked in the fireworks footage into the pupils, but this hint is too subtle and also thrown off when it cuts over to daytime shot taking its time to transition back over to the fireworks. The audience will view that as a time lapse unrelated to the character's mind. See what you can do in the editing bay with that info, a lot of times the hardest part is understanding how the brains of the masses function. Edited September 23, 2018 by Macks Fiiod Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dong Won Lee Posted September 23, 2018 Author Share Posted September 23, 2018 I think it is pretty good. (But I am not a commercial photog, only do documentary work.) It looks professional except for some color glitch that popped up for a second. Looked like a commercial for a hotel with product placements for the credit card and coffee. Good work! Thank you for your feedback! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dong Won Lee Posted September 23, 2018 Author Share Posted September 23, 2018 Yeah I wasn't getting that via the things on screen. It might be because the concept of "loving cafes" isn't a commonly discussed thing, so dialogue could be needed to establish what everything is pertaining to. If you need to stay visual, the transitions on screen don't exactly imply the fireworks are happening within the character's head. After a second look I see you masked in the fireworks footage into the pupils, but this hint is too subtle and also thrown off when it cuts over to daytime shot taking its time to transition back over to the fireworks. The audience will view that as a time lapse unrelated to the character's mind. See what you can do in the editing bay with that info, a lot of times the hardest part is understanding how the brains of the masses function. I see. Thank you for your input. It means a lot!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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