Self Discovery – short film made with very basic tools

[Max Wiemann]

Hi cinematographers

I’m a guy from germany/switzerland who loves films. So I started out making them in June.
This is my third project as a one-man-filmcrew, armed with just an iPhone and some basic filmmaking-tools to learn the craft.
My only actress was my girlfriend who supports me whole-heartedly.

My goal is to find a way to break into the industry independently or start my own career as a self employed film- and/or video-creator.
I'm not 20 anymore, so film school would be no real option for me, especially here in germany were taste seem to be poor and the film schools are pretty rigid systems.

So to make up for the lack of mentors, my hopes lie on the internetz – and I wanted to ask you for some honest feedback about my latest work.
Because while I think this film works, I’m not really satisfied. I just can’t put my finger on what it is exactly.
I would very much appreciate every feedback you are able to give regarding the cinematography, editing, story, sound etc. - of this film.

Thanks in advance!

 

Edited November 30, 2020 by Max Wiemann
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