youssef refaat Posted December 23, 2013 Share Posted December 23, 2013 (edited) Hi everyone, I just finished my first short script, its only 4 pages and I wanted some feedback on it. Thanks. Grief.pdf Edited December 23, 2013 by youssef refaat Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Premium Member Bill DiPietra Posted December 24, 2013 Premium Member Share Posted December 24, 2013 The dialogue is pretty good, but there needs to be more of a resolution at the end. As it stands right now, all it is is a confirmation of the man's analysis of the boy. Don't be afraid to make it a little longer. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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