Script Feedback

[youssef refaat]

Hi everyone, I just finished my first short script, its only 4 pages and I wanted some feedback on it. Thanks.

Grief.pdf

Edited December 23, 2013 by youssef refaat

[Bill DiPietra]

The dialogue is pretty good, but there needs to be more of a resolution at the end. As it stands right now, all it is is a confirmation of the man's analysis of the boy. Don't be afraid to make it a little longer.