David Katauskas Posted September 7, 2011 Share Posted September 7, 2011 This is my first short video production. It really can use an honest perspective and criticism. Thank you! http://player.vimeo.com/video/21111338 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David Katauskas Posted September 13, 2011 Author Share Posted September 13, 2011 Anybody? :-) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alain Lumina Posted October 9, 2011 Share Posted October 9, 2011 dupliduplicate Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alain Lumina Posted October 9, 2011 Share Posted October 9, 2011 well, one big thing is it's finished! Most projects never get that far including mine!! But I'll admit I only watched a couple minutes. The focus, color and lighting seem good, it was just too slow with no tension introduced. The intro is way, way too slow, long black pauses between opening credits. You can have dramatic pauses in film, but you have to build tension first, otherwise it just seems pointless and meandering. IDK if it's my system but the faster pans look jerky. too many shots of the dollhouse in opening, there's no introduction of characters, it's just objects, so there's no drama. it just looks ponderous with the very slow pacing. Who or what are we supposed to care about in the first minute? Now if right in the first 10 seconds after the title, you showed the daughter asking the mom "Do you like my dollhouse?" and the mom backs away terrified saying "Please don't!"; I'd be curious. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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