Yeah, i thought my critique was superfluous only because I know it was the time restriction that made you do it like this. The script is really good, I loved the ending. The voice over is a really tricky thing to get right, some of my favorite narration is in A CLockwork Orange, Taxi Driver, and Goodfellas. I think it's even harder than acting since you don't have the obvious advantage of showing emotion through body language. But it was nice try. keep it up.