All in all, not terrible. Your footage looks relatively good for the camera you used. That is a cool location, but I think it gets a little boring after a minute. The aged film look is a bit overdone these days, perhaps if you had toned it down and cut in city-scape b-roll it would have worked better. I think if you'd shot more locations then it would have maintained my interest.
I thought the editing was a great first try and manages to salvage what could have been a train-wreck.
Good job... you showed some talent, and the more of these things you make, the better they'll get!